City lit by fireflies
Lightning bugs of commerce
Floating along the sky line
It’s a city full of sparkling lights
That inhabits my mind most nights
It’s the backdrop of all those twinkling lights
Etched into the backs of memory
Fleeting and sweetly flying:
An intro into the operas of the mind
City lights of florescent yellow and white
Sing to me
In sleepy mantras
Entrenched in patented codex moments
Such sober beauty
Of singular moments and haunted ghosts: laughing barefoot children
Trying to catch little glow worms in glass jars
The pickle labels ripe and moldy
Peeling at the green skinned corners
City lit by fireflies
Lightning bugs of commerce
Floating along the sky line
Sing to me
Of soft casualties
The aneurysm that threatens to
Take over my brain
Is worming into my consciousness
Setting off fireworks in the dark corners
Of my concentration
City lit by fireflies
Sing
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I really liked this, it has a great flow and your imagery is gorgeous! The only crit I have is that I personally don't like the last stanza, "City lit by fireflies/ sing". To me it doesn't really need to be there and detracts from the stanza above which is so powerful! You have written a beautiful poem.
thank you chevy...I do hope this poems lives that long. I've been listening to U2 lately they can inspired really interesting things. the title...it feels a little bereft of the poem. If anyone out there has a idea please send me a line.
thanks again dear.
cheers CL.
This is the kind of poem you'll find in a collection of poetry 50 years from now.
I loved how you repeated "City lit by fireflies." It was very innovative.
I sort of felt a romantic sense to this poem...I don't know why, but I just did. The title was a little drab, but as far the poem goes, I loved it.